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What father will she dance with?
Which mother dries her tears?
And when the world takes her over,
Who can she tell her fears?

Home is a word without location,
A place to dwell by force.
She has a heart that's grown pieces.
The daughter of divorce.

Such longing innocence,
She wants to fight the world of pain.
But in every tear or grimace,
her tears turn her to shame.

They couldn't stay together,
Wouldn't learn to get along.
And soon their little girl would be
Their only bond that held strong.

And with no one to hold her hand, no sweet or loving kiss.
She learned to love to fight the world, and her life became a mess

Who now will she dance with,
Will she just have to dry her tears?
And when the world takes her over,
Who can she tell her fears?

Home is a word, but no location,
No place to dwell, no force.
She has a heart that's torn to pieces,
Through separation or divorce.

They argued through the signing
And who would keep the house.
When they noticed their only daughter,
Who was quiet as a mouse.

Father shook his head, no,
"I have no time to waste on this."
While to be a poor and single mother,
Wasn't mom's first wish.

And with no one to hold her head high, no sweet or loving kiss.
She learned to love to fight the world, and her life became a mess

Who now will she dance with,
Will she just have to dry her tears?
And when the world takes her over,
Who can she tell her fears?

Home is a word, but no location,
No place to dwell, no force.
She has a heart that's torn to pieces,
Through the signing for divorce.

Mama draws the short end
And takes her daughter with a sigh.
Before they depart for 'home'
They say their tearless goodbyes.

Remarriage takes barely years
And new families come in.
Mom and dad's first daughter
Ts left with the shortest end.

And she taught herself to hold her head high, to live without the world she missed.
She has learned that love has no world, and her parents have no forgiveness.

What father will she dance with?
Which mother dries her tears?
And when the world takes her over,
Who can she tell her fears?

Home is a word without location,
A place to dwell by force.
She has a heart that's grown pieces.
The daughter of divorce.
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"Then came a time I can hardly describe, a season underground. A bird trapped in a sewer, wings beating against the ceiling in that dark wet place, while the city rumbled on overhead. Her name was Lost. Her name was Nobody’s Daughter." - White Oleander by Janet Fitch

This song is something I wrote to describe my feelings on divorce. Some of this comes from my experiences with my parents.
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Hello! Okay, first, I liked it. Loved it. The emotions are honest and strong and communicate well. The bolded parts seemed almost like a chorus to a song. There are a few places where the rhythm is a bit broken, like in the stanza "Mama draws the short end". "Remarriage takes barely years" also seemed a bit awkward, and I believe there is a typo where you said "Ts left". I really, really like the opening and closing stanzas, I think they have a great rhyme scheme & pattern and basically sum up the message of the whole poem. The girl being "the daughter of divorce" instead of the daughter of the mom and dad--as if she has become defined by the separation--is very powerful. Great job!
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I am not sure how it would sound as a song, but it is a very beautiful poem. You can tell that you wrote how you felt when your parents were getting divorced. This poem brought up memories of my parents divorce and life after. You most definitely have talent writing poetry and should feel very proud of this work. I would like to hear it as a song if you have written any music. I really enjoyed reading this. There is a spelling error. It says 'Ts' and I think you meant 'Is'. Other than the spelling error, I would say it was a perfect poem.
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!DeamonicPlauge Apr 1, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I actually am trying not to cry...
I swear if my parents were to read this...
maybe, just maybe, they would understand what I've been going through with their divorce these last two years...
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=SelahDeNoctiluca Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: I'm sorry. I wish I could help you out! :hug:
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Wow. This is how I felt for years and still feel sometimes. My first memory is my mother leaving me with my paranoid delusional schizophrenic grandmother for a day so she could work. My parents were like that and living with a bipolar mom and a disabled father is not a home. I have no home just a house.
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=SelahDeNoctiluca Jan 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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~Vegetabelle Dec 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful! Its so sad, but extremely well-written.
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=SelahDeNoctiluca Dec 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. ^^
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~Vegetabelle Dec 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
no problem!
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~WeirdoQueen Dec 16, 2011  Student General Artist
It's things like this that make me feel like I'm not the only one out there going through what I go through, that I'm not as alone as I think.
And I thank you for it.
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=SelahDeNoctiluca Dec 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: I'm so glad you like it.
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~Peregrinestar Dec 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
What ever happened to Vows?
Very nice :D
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